Thursday, August 12, 2010

This Year, I hope to be more understanding

Dad, you come home late, dark circles under your eyes, and you walk slowly towards your room and collapse onto the bed. I complain, you listen, I complain, you nod, I complain some more, but you dont shout at me. You say you understand, but I say you dont.

You've taught me life lessons, you've taught me how to handle problems, you make me feel protected, you pass word of wisdom. You're like a sun to me, always there, beaming light and warmth of my life. But still I would complain, to an innocent person like you, as if the love you gave me, was not enough.

This year, I hope to be more understanding. I'll greet you with a warm smile, when you come home late from work, I will respect you, because you are my rock and sun.

This year, I hope to be more understanding. I'll let you sleep when you're tired, I'll listen to you, I will not complain.

You give me shelter of care, you've taught me what's right and wrong, and lead our house, with instruction from the bible.

This year, I will be more understanding, and will do my best to be your first class daughter.

8 comments:

  1. awwww how nice:) I like your first paragraph the most because it made the reader's heart feel that moment you're describing.

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  2. This is awesome! I am glad that you decided to give this to your dad, I am sure that he will appreciate it!

    Think about revising your line breaks.

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  3. I like the first stanza a lot because you put a lot of detail and i could actually imagine what was going on. :)

    -Paola C. Rivera

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  4. Good job, I could really showed lots of imagery and it flowed. keep up the good work!

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  5. I can really tell your regret misunderstanding our dad and how you want to be an undersanding person, although i already think you are! Great job!!

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  6. man! that was really good! I love your refrain you put them right in the perfect places! at the beginging i love how you discribe how your dad comes in late, tier etc! also I really like the last sentence when you say "and will do my best to be your first class daughter" i like it because it has its flow, and melody good job :)

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  7. Wow absolutely beautiful I love it...Very VEry very very very well written. I can imagine it its sooo clear wonderful

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  8. ILOVEIT!
    So much imagery, pauses, poetic devices, mystery! Super gorgeouss! :)

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